ok back to it.
Mark in you game you have ability skills listed and then you have the "skill point cost". This should be relabeld "ability point cost" page 13.
Page 29 has
-almost traces of the Archons have been obliterated
also
- She is among the less malicious of the Maxinays, especially compared to her young nephew Quenlin (6th level human, 2nd Circle Hermetic), vacationing with his aunt in Yseng. Quenlin, named for his formerly-doting aunt, is a charming albino, but sociopathic and sadistic, and obtains the girls that his aunt requires.
this sentence is uh, well you know, bad. sorry.
page 30
-Zostig became the location of the new “parent church” (of Western Narbohring for the Church of Zhol)
should "of Zhol for Western Narbohring.
Include Black Ichor in the alchmist's listing of supplies.
tutorage is actually tutelage,
page 31
Here, though, are described many of the outlying regions of the area known colloquially as “the East”.
awkward.
. Ringing the gong summons a mighty roc, carrying a gondola ustd for transport of one or a few giant-sized humanoids or goods.
used is spelled wrong. as is specific in the next sentance.
ah the hammer of storms.
on page 33
does Orms Dhalgang really have enough skillpoints to have 8th circle hermetic and 5th ritual? the system seems to make this very hard to do at that level, 16th.
page 36
should Slavepits have a space in it?
headache clan sounds a bit, uh bad.
should smok dragon be smoke dragon?
page 38 Toxicology is spelled wrong as toxocology.
done for now. I can't read about more cities.
Page 29 has
-almost traces of the Archons have been obliterated
also
- She is among the less malicious of the Maxinays, especially compared to her young nephew Quenlin (6th level human, 2nd Circle Hermetic), vacationing with his aunt in Yseng. Quenlin, named for his formerly-doting aunt, is a charming albino, but sociopathic and sadistic, and obtains the girls that his aunt requires.
this sentence is uh, well you know, bad. sorry.
page 30
-Zostig became the location of the new “parent church” (of Western Narbohring for the Church of Zhol)
should "of Zhol for Western Narbohring.
Include Black Ichor in the alchmist's listing of supplies.
tutorage is actually tutelage,
page 31
Here, though, are described many of the outlying regions of the area known colloquially as “the East”.
awkward.
. Ringing the gong summons a mighty roc, carrying a gondola ustd for transport of one or a few giant-sized humanoids or goods.
used is spelled wrong. as is specific in the next sentance.
ah the hammer of storms.
on page 33
does Orms Dhalgang really have enough skillpoints to have 8th circle hermetic and 5th ritual? the system seems to make this very hard to do at that level, 16th.
page 36
should Slavepits have a space in it?
headache clan sounds a bit, uh bad.
should smok dragon be smoke dragon?
page 38 Toxicology is spelled wrong as toxocology.
done for now. I can't read about more cities.
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